‘’The pearl” By John Steinbeck is to detailed, it is so detailed you can barley read it. Also there is a fading story line in the end and it is totally predictable which makes a book boring, and pointless to read. Just like a movie where a princess needs a prince because she is trapped in a tower. Boohoo, here are some ways to make your book flash, also what not to do to make people drop their book on the first page.
Picture a book selling no copies because it is predictable… no fun. So to stop this from happing try not to give everything away on the first page like Steinbeck did ,On pg 29 “The sound of the family hung in the air by their straw hut then the song of evil came and with it came the doctor”. This one sentence tells you there poor and the doctor is evil. This gives away half the story now all you need to know why he is bad with he tells a couple pages later that he sent somebody to steal the pearl that night. So to stop from doing this you should let the story unfold slowly. Another way to get the story out would be to let it out in the last few letters but only if was a suspense or mystery. (Those ones are my favorite)
Some examples to support my thoughts of Steinbeck using too many details. “pg 19 It captured the light and refined it and gave it a silver incandescence. It was as large as a seagulls egg.” That was three details, One is good two is okay tree is way to detailed. That is almost have adjectives Who wants to be listing off stuff like that. A good reason not to this is to let the reader do this. Another not to is make the plot line unpredictable which makes it fun to read. The only way to stop this to be imaginative.
Some ways to make your story better are to not jump from place to place because then you will confuse your readers. Here is an example:” It was a cold sunny day and we were on a picnic in Wisconsin but California is better, my favorite fruit is the orange it is good”. The best way to stop this from happing is to reread you’re your work. A good role model for writing is C.S lewis he has writing a few books but he is very good. As you can see The pearl by John Steinbeck is poorly written.
Tyler Hull
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