the story

The story “Deep water” by William.o.dougless made a big connection for me because I hate water. I hate water so much that I only like to go swimming in pools. This story is the exact same as mine except how I got scared. This book is also a good written book because it really seems real. Not like some made up story just real. This makes my real life connection a real life connection.
One day my family and I went to Lake Michigan and we went out on the sand bars far-out from the beach and a boat came and made some big waves that knocked me off the bar and into the deep. I am a good swimmer but I could not swim in the big waves. So I started to go under longer on every wave until I got messed up and got uncoordinated with the waves went up when it went down so when it came up I was down, Just like when William The kid from the story got dunked by a big dude and his plan of pushing up from the bottom that failed. It was almost over I hit the next sandbar I did not really know it was the sand bar because I felt dizzy, also William lost it and the next thing he knew was that he was puking on the ground at the pool. Then I waited for my strength and swam back to the beach. (The sand bars are like rungs on a later each one after the other one I was on the third one out)
The next time we went any were with waves I did not go further than chest deep unlike William, he did not go swimming at all. After a few visits my dad noticed that I was not swimming at all so he asked what was wrong and of course I told him “nothing”. After a while my mom wanted me to go skiing. And I always said no but one time she convinced me to. So when I went skiing I just lost all my fear because all I had to do was stay up till the boat came which was easy so now I love to ski, Just like William all he had to do was practice then he would not drown in his shock.
As you can see I have a lot of connections to this story especially with the sandbars and the declining pool. This story is for people like you and me to tell us that nothing is imposable and with practice you can do almost anything. A second thing this story was telling me was not to give up keep going. This is why “Deep Water” by William. o. Douglass has made so many connections to my life.

The pearl

 ‘’The pearl” By John Steinbeck is to detailed, it is so detailed you can barley read it. Also there is a fading story line in the end and it is totally predictable which makes a book boring, and pointless to read. Just like a movie where a princess needs a prince because she is trapped in a tower. Boohoo, here are some ways to make your book flash, also what not to do to make people drop their book on the first page.

       Picture a book selling no copies because it is predictable… no fun. So to stop this from happing try not to give everything away on the first page like Steinbeck did ,On pg 29 “The sound of the family hung in the air by their straw hut then the song of evil came and with it came the doctor”. This one sentence tells you there poor and the doctor is evil. This gives away half the story now all you need to know why he is bad with he tells a couple pages later that he sent somebody to steal the pearl that night. So to stop from doing this you should let the story unfold slowly. Another way to get the story out would be to let it out in the last few letters but only if was a suspense or mystery. (Those ones are my favorite)

  Some examples to support my thoughts of Steinbeck using too many details. “pg 19 It captured the light and refined it and gave it a silver incandescence. It was as large as a seagulls egg.” That was three details, One is good two is okay tree is way to detailed. That is almost have adjectives Who wants to be listing off stuff like that. A good reason not to this is to let the reader do this. Another not to is make the plot line unpredictable which makes it fun to read. The only way to stop this to be imaginative.

Some ways to make your story better are to not jump from place to place because then you will confuse your readers. Here is an example:” It was a cold sunny day and we were on a picnic in Wisconsin but California is better, my favorite fruit is the orange it is good”. The best way to stop this from happing is to reread you’re your work. A good role model for writing is C.S lewis he has writing a few books but he is very good. As you can see The pearl by John Steinbeck is poorly written.

                                                                                                                          Tyler Hull

lesson to the pearl

In this  story the lesson is not to let fame and fortune get the best or you will be lost forever  in the abbess with no way  to leave. Another lesson to this story could be fortune only comes your way once so you have to use it to the best of your advantage. Both ways could work but i am going with the 1st one. The second one is just there to make this look long. Some things that back my conclusion up are that the whole story is based on Kino and the pearl. Another reason is that When Kino killed a man fortune got the best of him and from there on every thing went wrong.This is why you do not let fame and fortune get the best of or you will end up with nothing like Kino.

destruction from the pearl

Juana belives that the pearl will destroy them because since they found it bad luck and "Eviel" has came to them. She also thinks this because he is geting muged by people at night and some people are trying to steal it in his house. I to would have liked to get rid of it but, oppertunity only knocks once.
 The pearl will eventually destroy them by causeing kino to go mad and kill his family then commit sucide because he can not belive or live with what he had done. This is true because it has already started First the robber dude then he killed a man and he just cant fight people forever, and even if he could fight for ever his wife would leave him and the bby then what would the point be to keep fighting. There would be no point so again like i said....sucide.

The Pearl

Some of my thoughts on the pearl.

 I think this is a very good book so for except for the plot line it seems to be weak and predictable. The thing I thought that was the most interesting was the people in straw city and how they could change sides with Kino so fast like, one second they love him then... poof hatred. I am guessing that Kino will kill his whole family out of his anger then run away and commit it suicide.  I  like this author so far and I might read more of his books.